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totalchaos; my Sonic fanfiction
Tweet Topic Started: Feb 12 2012, 01:01 PM (465 Views)
deadsoul	Feb 12 2012, 01:01 PM Post #1
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	Please click this link to read my fanfic totalchaos



Clementine	Feb 13 2012, 08:28 AM Post #2
Yep. Posts: 1,397 Group: A Rank Hero Member #12,099 Joined: May 26, 2011 Steam ID: Maximus123458 Game Currently Playing: Megaman X6	Out of curiosity. Why is this in a blog instead of here? Edited by Clementine, Feb 13 2012, 08:28 AM.



deadsoul	Feb 13 2012, 01:38 PM Post #3
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	I guess I like having this as a seperate place for comments, faqs, updates, etc. It's more organized that way. Edited by deadsoul, Feb 14 2012, 02:58 PM.



Clementine	Feb 13 2012, 03:47 PM Post #4
Yep. Posts: 1,397 Group: A Rank Hero Member #12,099 Joined: May 26, 2011 Steam ID: Maximus123458 Game Currently Playing: Megaman X6	Not really, you can delete your blog post (I think) and repost the stories here. =3



deadsoul	Feb 14 2012, 08:27 PM Post #5
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	Happy V-day to all my totalchaos fans



deadsoul	Feb 17 2012, 12:50 PM Post #6
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	Now posting chapters weekly rather than daily. (Every Friday) Edited by deadsoul, Feb 17 2012, 12:50 PM.



deadsoul	Feb 24 2012, 03:15 PM Post #7
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	Preview: Spoiler: click to toggle Time to hit the climax of this battle. Me and Shadow fight all out. Next Time: Shadow vs Silver act 3



deadsoul	Mar 8 2012, 01:55 PM Post #8
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	With spring break starting I just may have time to upload a few more chapters this week than I usually do . Edited by deadsoul, Mar 8 2012, 01:58 PM.



Beowulf	Mar 8 2012, 05:04 PM Post #9
Thou Hast NO Need for Fancy Avatars Posts: 622 Group: S Rank Knight Member #12,804 Joined: March 4, 2012 Gender: Male Country: United States of America Xbox Live Gamertag: allbritton baby Game Currently Playing: Tenchu: Wrath of Heaven	I like this saga i hope your new ones are as good as your old ones
	True Beauty Lies in something that lives forever,never rotting or fading~Sasori Father...I don't have a father, I just don't like you thats all~Dante WELCOME TO DIE~Magneto I Just beat Mag-freakin-Neto...where yo curleh mustache at?-Deadpool Your fear,how it shines like a beacon~Nightmare(or was beacon,bacon?) My FCs: Lozo,Alina,Kokoton,Seizan,Orina,Zavier,Raiku,Stazino,Konzu,Aquatos,Tapio,Lisa, Colt,Kane Erebus


deadsoul	Mar 9 2012, 08:09 AM Post #10
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	hehe, glad you like it! Edited by deadsoul, Mar 9 2012, 08:36 AM.



Shadow knuckles	Mar 11 2012, 05:28 PM Post #11
Character Select Posts: 7 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #12,821 Joined: March 11, 2012	It Rooks Hard



Lord DragonFlame	Mar 12 2012, 12:39 PM Post #12
Christmas is back again Posts: 17,411 Group: Former Monarchs Member #348 Joined: December 9, 2006 Gender: Male Steam ID: Warzak85DF	So, what's with all the smilies in a fanfiction. Second I must agree with Max, consider moving it, or else the first thing you'll see is the last chapter. Do you think everyone will even make it down to the bottom reading it from scratch. Nevertheless I'm more concerned around the use of smilies. Remove em, because they ain't exactly making the story any prettier. Yet I know, most members do not value the shed of advice, so whether you decide to ignore such faculties, that's totally up to you. If what it'll be worth. Here lemme add some useful tips in the future. No smilies. Instead describe the character emotions, that'll be the controlled or those around. Um! Pro tip, evaluate the surrounding's. From there, see to use it accordingly from the character's perspective. Spend more time upon each chapter, seriously you'll get a lot more from catching upon your own stuff before filling us in around the whereabouts of this follow-up story. Now before I even considering doing an extensive reply, would you even considering advancing into the big league, or do you prefer this rather childish, yet amusingly enough for some, by all means. I ain't here to interfere, I'm only trying to give you some personalized advice from my point of view. Take it as more then that. It could very well benefit around your grades in the future.
	Working on banner, but if your looking to have some time off. Come, visit my channel on youtube. Warzak85DF's Let's Play corner


deadsoul	Mar 12 2012, 01:40 PM Post #13
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	Alright, the smilies are gone and I'll do my best to add more detail the story. I have no intention of moving the story. I'm sorry if you have a problem with that, but please stop asking. Anyway, thanks for the advice.



Lord DragonFlame	Mar 13 2012, 11:57 AM Post #14
Christmas is back again Posts: 17,411 Group: Former Monarchs Member #348 Joined: December 9, 2006 Gender: Male Steam ID: Warzak85DF	Well I can't ultimately demand anything. Nor was it meant as a question good sir. At least I've given your fan-fiction an attempt after the removal of all those smilies. As far I'm concerned, this has great potential, though I would've liked to see whether you'll do some changes in the possible near future. Nevertheless I must ask, why did you end up using first person view?
	Working on banner, but if your looking to have some time off. Come, visit my channel on youtube. Warzak85DF's Let's Play corner


deadsoul	Mar 13 2012, 01:56 PM Post #15
Marble Garden Act 2 Posts: 163 Group: A Rank Adventurer Member #12,715 Joined: January 20, 2012 Xbox Live Gamertag: darkhanyuu 3DS Friend Code: 0044-3292-9634	DragonFlame Mar 13 2012, 11:57 AM Nevertheless I must ask, why did you end up using first person view? I didn't really have a reason, just felt like doing so. Plus it help the reader feel like they're actually in the story. Got bored of using quotes, so I changed the dialogue style. If I have time I'll go back and do the same for previous chapters. Edited by deadsoul, Mar 13 2012, 08:21 PM.



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