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Alexis the Mutant; I tried, and failed... sorry.
Topic Started: Jul 6 2011, 06:14 AM (257 Views)
Tashie Jul 6 2011, 06:14 AM Post #1
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 Name: Alexis

Age: 14

Species: Mutant hedgehog

Gender: Female

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Attitude: She is quite shy and hate being in centrum. Nobody knows that much about her, and a few asks about it.

Powers: No real, they were gone since the experiments. But she has trained herself to control fire and shoot fire.

Back story: Alexis was kidnapped to a secret mutating base as baby. The first experiment on her was to make it harder for her to spin and also make it harder for her to defend herself when she should be tested. She was educated to hate the free mobians, or the "freelies" as she preferred to call them. When Alexis turned 8, she should out on her first spy mission, but soon she got lost in the woods. She met a bunch of the "freelies" and she got the real story of everything, and fleed from the base.

Family: None, they were killed or lost.

Friends: No real, but she knows Knuckles a little bit.

Rivals: None

Enemy: Dr. Ivo "Eggman" Robotnik
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L Dragon Jul 6 2011, 09:10 AM Post #2
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 I'm not sure if you mean mutated or mutant. Normally, mutants have powers of some kind, which separates them from the normal.(thinking X-men wise that is) I actually don't see anything in this bio that would make her a mutant hedgehog. Besides her longer tail, I see nothing else. See was experimented on, which in my opinion, would make her a mutated hedgehog. Mutated meaning she was once normal and now she isn't. Also, mutants are normally born with said powers or differences. I think what your looking for is altered hedgehog maybe. Then again, tis your character so I don't know, just throwing in my opinion.

Second thing. Its frowned upon here to link your characters with official sonic characters. The back story was good until you introduced the idea that Egghead would be the one that kidnapped her, and that Knuckles(maybe Sonic and Co) were the free mobians she met. In any case, not bad really. More info on her would be nice. Just because people don't know much about her doesn't mean she doesn't have a personality. It would also help to explain how ALL of her family died or got lost. And lastly, how did she get to know knuckles in the first place.(even though its frowned upon you can still add in said info.)
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Lord DragonFlame Jul 6 2011, 09:33 AM Post #3
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I'm continuing from were my good friend left off.
This is nothing but a serious statement as it's been used way to often. Ain't there something more out of the usual that could've involved her parents.
As what Uverworld, (lilfate) pointed out, how did they die. Was it normal conditions?

In other words, a creative end of adding her parents would've been a bonus.

And second, that's already been mentioned.
Knowing a canon character isn't cool, unless you have a perfect reason of doing so.

Now I have never had a mutant of nether species before, but surely a picture can't obsolete her whole appearance. Maybe work on that, as the doll maker is only there to provide momentary reference, (close similarity that is.)

With a few tweaks here and there, this could be a pretty good character, but as for now, this'll receive a minor thumbs down until those things are solved, or ignored, it's up to you really.
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