One Little Kiss

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One Little Kiss
Tweet Topic Started: Nov 11 2010, 06:25 AM (202 Views)
~~Raven the Fox~~	Nov 11 2010, 06:25 AM Post #1
I'll never let you go Posts: 2,954 Group: Game Over :( Member #10,731 Joined: February 3, 2010	I am hoping you will like it, but I am sure you all won't. ;P Because of the person who it's based on. This is also on an offical fanfic site, btw I can put the link in y sig if you wanna keep up with it, IF you like it. Anyways I'm gonna stop babbling and give you all 14 chapters. The story is unfinished btw, so yea. Here's chapter 1 Chapter 1: Meeting Him [Samantha's POV] It was a dark and stormy night. I was in the orphanage, the hard, cold floor felt as if breathing coldly on my body. I shivered slowly, carefully, not to wake anyone up. I tried to talk quietly, but all that came out was a harsh whisper. "W...why am I here? I...I don't understand..." I whispered to myself. I tried to get the thought away and I closed my eyes. What was gonna happen...was probably the best thing that could happen. Not for me, but...all those other crazed fans. I tried to go to sleep, but all I could dream about was me, in the same orphanage, limping, screaming, as I lay there limp, dying. I quickly fluttered my eyes open and saw that I was no longer in the orphanage. I was in a room, that was small and I looked down to see my clothes were no longer rags. I was dressed in a night gown. I looked around to see the walls were a blue color, and I was on a striped couch that was a navy blue. I looked around and saw someone in the kitchen. I yawned quietly, but the person that was in the kitchen apparently heard it. The person smiled and came in the room that I was in. I then realized it was a living room. The person sat next to me. He was a boy, had brown, cute hair... 'What, what am I saying...! I just met this guy...oh, no..And..those, mesmorizing, cute, brown eyes...Oh Samantha stop it! Hes not gonna fall for you!' I thought. The boy just smiled still and flip his hair. "Hi. I believe you're Samantha Belle, right?" He asked. I noticed he had a cute, deep voice and was 'baby-faced' I giggled nervously. "Y, yes...I am Samantha Belle. Who are you...and what am I doing here?" I asked, confused. He laughed. He had a cute laugh. I felt like I had known him or heard him from some TV channel, but I couldn't remember who. "I am Justin Bieber. I believe you've heard of me, no?" He was serious for a second then grinned. "I..I think I have...Im still collecting my thoughts..." I laughed. Justin laughed , "Well...I saw on the news that this girl named, Samantha Belle-" He paused and put his finger on my chest, which made me blush, Then he continued, "Was in an orphanage fire. You were asleep and didnt realize the place was on fire. So I decided to be kind and take you under my wing." He quickly put his finger off my chest when he was done speaking though, seeing as that made him blush as well. "So, do, uh, you want some breakfast?" Justin asked me. I laughed nervously, "Um...are you sure...it's okay?" He heard my stomach growl loudly. "Yes, it's fine. Anything for you Samantha." He winked and went in the kitchen to get some breakfast. I smiled and blushed, but was confused as well. Why was the biggest popstar in the world hitting on me after I just met him? I tried to shrug it off, but it wouldn't go away. Kinda like...it was a true statement. Like...he WANTED to hit on me. And for some reason my brain was telling me, "Yes, Samantha. Hit on him back." But I didn't want to...or...did I? I wasn't really sure, and wouldn't it make him feel awkward after I just met him? Oh wait. I forgot. It wouldn't, since he's already hitting on me. I blushed as Justin got the breakfast ready and tried to erase all thoughts of hitting on him as I went to the table. Yeah theres the 1st chapter, I have 16 more. review please~



Katsuko	Nov 13 2010, 04:40 PM Post #2
Sandopolis Act 1 Posts: 1,687 Group: S Rank Hero Member #1,933 Joined: August 14, 2007 Gender: Male	Justin Bieber fanfiction. \|D 'Tis a highly lulsome concept. I'm not sure what to say here... To be honest, it seems very funny, and while there are technical problems, they almost contribute more than they detract. I guess if I had to give crits, I'd say try not to overexplain--especially by way of adverbs. Don't yawn quietly; just yawn. Why? Becaue quietly doesn't contribute anything significant, and any word that contributes nothing should die. IOW, let the situations and the actions and the dialogue speak for themselves. Edited by Katsuko, Nov 13 2010, 04:43 PM.
	<3 All you need is love <3


~~Raven the Fox~~	Nov 13 2010, 05:28 PM Post #3
I'll never let you go Posts: 2,954 Group: Game Over :( Member #10,731 Joined: February 3, 2010	Okay, so you're saying my stories good right? ;3 Do you want me to post the next chapter?



Katsuko	Nov 14 2010, 06:14 PM Post #4
Sandopolis Act 1 Posts: 1,687 Group: S Rank Hero Member #1,933 Joined: August 14, 2007 Gender: Male	Quote: Okay, so you're saying my stories good right? ;3 It's funny \|D Quote: Do you want me to post the next chapter? But yeah, gopher et.
	<3 All you need is love <3


~~Raven the Fox~~	Nov 15 2010, 04:00 AM Post #5
I'll never let you go Posts: 2,954 Group: Game Over :( Member #10,731 Joined: February 3, 2010	Okay, I will post the next chapter sometime this afternoon.



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