fight for freedom

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fight for freedom; the fight is on!!!
Tweet Topic Started: Aug 28 2009, 01:50 PM (365 Views)
decoyboy320	Aug 28 2009, 01:50 PM Post #1
Character Select Posts: 13 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #10,288 Joined: August 26, 2009	here a is the first issue of my comic FIGHT FOR FREEDOM (note i changed it from monthly to whenever) Edited by decoyboy320, Aug 29 2009, 11:56 AM.



Zak	Aug 28 2009, 01:52 PM Post #2
For The Circle Posts: 4,002 Group: D Rank Legend Member #9,748 Joined: February 10, 2009 3DS Friend Code: 1118-0225-4062 Steam ID: zakth686	Luigi got pwnd. Even thought I'm not quit sure what shadow's doing, to me it looks quite wrong, but that's my sick mind.
	"Ati Ramar, In defeat we learn."


decoyboy320	Aug 28 2009, 02:02 PM Post #3
Character Select Posts: 13 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #10,288 Joined: August 26, 2009	lol
	check out my monthly comic FIGHT FOR FREEDOM http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147268/1/?x=0#post8293410 join my RP sonic meets marvel http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147406/1/


Cee Jay Haych	Aug 28 2009, 02:10 PM Post #4
"I didn't use the whole thing ...." Posts: 3,252 Group: =SB= Kings Member #9,868 Joined: March 28, 2009	decoyboy320 Aug 28 2009, 02:02 PM lol Please try to make your post 3 words minimum. As for the comic, I'll reserve judgement until I've seen a finished page, there is too little to go on in this preview.



decoyboy320	Aug 28 2009, 02:20 PM Post #5
Character Select Posts: 13 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #10,288 Joined: August 26, 2009	ok ill make a better one ok the first issue is up those two or three comments were for the preview Edited by decoyboy320, Aug 28 2009, 07:52 PM.
	check out my monthly comic FIGHT FOR FREEDOM http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147268/1/?x=0#post8293410 join my RP sonic meets marvel http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147406/1/


Laisga	Aug 29 2009, 08:19 AM Post #6
Hydrocity Act 1 Posts: 91 Group: C Rank Adventurer Member #10,243 Joined: August 14, 2009	did u chose to make paint backgrounds or you didn't know how to make the sprites backgrounds transparent?



decoyboy320	Aug 29 2009, 10:03 AM Post #7
Character Select Posts: 13 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #10,288 Joined: August 26, 2009	i choose to do paint backgrounds so just encase i couldn't find a good background for an epic place i could make one
	check out my monthly comic FIGHT FOR FREEDOM http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147268/1/?x=0#post8293410 join my RP sonic meets marvel http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147406/1/


Cee Jay Haych	Aug 29 2009, 10:22 AM Post #8
"I didn't use the whole thing ...." Posts: 3,252 Group: =SB= Kings Member #9,868 Joined: March 28, 2009	Sorry but I'm going to be blunt here. The resizing of the sprites is terrible, they are all blocky and squashed. The background needs alot more detail over than a line and paint filled in. You should try adding speech bubbles instead of just drawing a line to the words. The plot needs alot of work, as there doesn't seem to be one. Sorry for sounding harsh but its true.



decoyboy320	Aug 29 2009, 10:31 AM Post #9
Character Select Posts: 13 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #10,288 Joined: August 26, 2009	nah its ok,im all ears for those kinda things.anyways the sprites ARE blocky but i cant change that right at this second.Ill try to make the backgrounds with a little more detail when the story gets more through :P.and speech bubbles sound good ill change it in the next chapter which im working on at this very reply. thanks for taking your time to add these things in here is the second issue.....not really long but ill try to make the third 10 pages long it has some mess ups in it here is an extra i just wanted to put in Edited by decoyboy320, Aug 29 2009, 12:46 PM.
	check out my monthly comic FIGHT FOR FREEDOM http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147268/1/?x=0#post8293410 join my RP sonic meets marvel http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147406/1/


Laisga	Aug 29 2009, 04:42 PM Post #10
Hydrocity Act 1 Posts: 91 Group: C Rank Adventurer Member #10,243 Joined: August 14, 2009	im gonna be blunt too, sorry but you should type your text first then make a bubble or w/e to prevent too little space/too much space. and in panels two and three I don't understand why the background is half there but i could barely read what you wrote not to mention proof reading before you publish it. your SFX confuse me but i won't really judge it since everyone isn't a SFX wizard, other than that its just the sprites that need to be resized properly and i didn't wanna sound harsh either Edited by Laisga, Aug 29 2009, 04:44 PM.



Gallant Vision	Aug 30 2009, 07:24 AM Post #11
Sky Sanctuary Zone Posts: 6,835 Group: B Rank Legend Member #9,330 Joined: September 4, 2008	I'll be the third to be blunt here. The idea is good, but you are executing it poorly. For one, you are progressing things a little fast. You could've stretched out the fight between Sonic and Rob a little bit. While still on the fight, did Sonic kick Rob through the border between the second and fourth panels? I don't know about others, but there is a good way and a sloppy way to do this, and you've done the latter. Also, you got to be sure that everyone can read the entire text. In that cave, I could barely read some of the dialogue. And also, you could have the characters say more than what you have been. And, I wouldn't know for sure because I've barely read any Archie comics, but I don't think Mina can rev her fet like Sonic. Those are my two (or perhaps three) cents on how you could improve things. Also...WAS THAT STREET FIGHTER'S ZANGIEF IN THE CAVE WITH SHADOW?
	I have an interest in spriting. If anyone has a request, don't hesitate to ask. Deep stuff below: Spoiler: click to toggle The world. Filled with millions of differences. But despite the fact, we all are brothers and sisters, Inhabiting and living under the same sky. But despite this, we war and kill our siblings over trivial things, Staining the earth on which we all walk, With the blood of our brothers, With the blood of our sisters. The sky under which we go through our lives weeps, For the clouds surely know of the atrocities we commit. We slay, maim, gouge, and destroy our siblings, In the name of things which ought not be fought for. Approach a member of the family not, With the tainted lash of hatred, But with the pure flower of love. ======================================= The sword. A weapon who's blade is stained red With the blood of its countless victims. Were it alive, what would such a being feel? Would it live only to fight, And fight only to live? Would it be controlled By those with the skill to do so? I believe that it would cry For each person it has ever brought harm to, Its tears as red as the blood it has spilled.


Zak	Aug 30 2009, 07:59 AM Post #12
For The Circle Posts: 4,002 Group: D Rank Legend Member #9,748 Joined: February 10, 2009 3DS Friend Code: 1118-0225-4062 Steam ID: zakth686	Sonikku-Otaku Aug 30 2009, 07:24 AM rev her fet like Sonic. nice typo sonikku.
	"Ati Ramar, In defeat we learn."


decoyboy320	Aug 30 2009, 03:43 PM Post #13
Character Select Posts: 13 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #10,288 Joined: August 26, 2009	thanks for the suggestions.im moving it fast because i wanna finish (spoiler) the cave scene before school starts lol sorry for that and note im only a beginner so ill be improving and yes it was him with shadow knew someone would notice him oh and mina can rev her feet like sonic...she trained with the freedom fighters for 5 days and got to be almost as fast as sonic but maybe 3 on a scale of 5 (to me sonic is a 6 XD) Edited by decoyboy320, Aug 30 2009, 06:48 PM.
	check out my monthly comic FIGHT FOR FREEDOM http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147268/1/?x=0#post8293410 join my RP sonic meets marvel http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147406/1/


Gallant Vision	Aug 30 2009, 09:14 PM Post #14
Sky Sanctuary Zone Posts: 6,835 Group: B Rank Legend Member #9,330 Joined: September 4, 2008	Well like I said, I wouldn't know since I only read one or two Archie comics.
	I have an interest in spriting. If anyone has a request, don't hesitate to ask. Deep stuff below: Spoiler: click to toggle The world. Filled with millions of differences. But despite the fact, we all are brothers and sisters, Inhabiting and living under the same sky. But despite this, we war and kill our siblings over trivial things, Staining the earth on which we all walk, With the blood of our brothers, With the blood of our sisters. The sky under which we go through our lives weeps, For the clouds surely know of the atrocities we commit. We slay, maim, gouge, and destroy our siblings, In the name of things which ought not be fought for. Approach a member of the family not, With the tainted lash of hatred, But with the pure flower of love. ======================================= The sword. A weapon who's blade is stained red With the blood of its countless victims. Were it alive, what would such a being feel? Would it live only to fight, And fight only to live? Would it be controlled By those with the skill to do so? I believe that it would cry For each person it has ever brought harm to, Its tears as red as the blood it has spilled.


decoyboy320	Aug 31 2009, 10:32 AM Post #15
Character Select Posts: 13 Group: E Rank Adventurer Member #10,288 Joined: August 26, 2009	lol its ok,i barley read them myself Edited by decoyboy320, Aug 31 2009, 01:16 PM.
	check out my monthly comic FIGHT FOR FREEDOM http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147268/1/?x=0#post8293410 join my RP sonic meets marvel http://sonicblast.org/topic/7147406/1/


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