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Lesson Three

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(I will join to offer what little advice I've to offer and to receive helpful advise as well. Already knowing that I am far too late with lessons, I will, however, start from the very beginning and work my way to the top. In the meanwhile, I will add crits to current lessons everyone is doing, if this is acceptable. This will be edited when I receive an answer and will be converted as the first lesson for me, yes? Thank ye, and goodbye.)

DragonFlame

Sep 25 2008, 02:33 PM

Eon

It's about time to give you a lesson. I mean sure it was good, but there is something missing and that is what you could say as more descriptive. Nothing wrong with your writing, just i wished to see more come out from this. But in fact, this is just in the beginner level. So i leave you go through, but i would have liked to see a better post. I know you can from what i have seen. There is some RP living within you. Haha! True though, here is your given 3 experience points. I won't be as easy in further lessons.

Timothy

A most brilliant way to pursue forwards. And since you probably want to know her decision. Well i won't let you down. Since you made your own approach it will be a quite random choice.

"Fine, but only until the rain fades away." The cranky old woman made way towards a successful negotiator.

So all in all, you been given 4 experience points. Final lesson will soon be revealed.

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Well it's about time i make an attempt on the next lesson. I will use a dragon and a boy to create this.

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Lesson Three

His hands we're loosing, using all of his remaining strength keeping him from fallen straight down into the hard surface. He knew his companion would come and save him. But time wasn't on the boy's bright side. A worried noise rustled his ears of what danger were about to become. The only available branch would loose ground.

Seconds later his hands couldn't hold, downwards he passed like a bomb ready about to get smashed. At hand, he would not be left alone. His companion would finally came for his rescue. With a bearable soft landing he would soon find him self staring upon tree's approaching ahead. Worried of why his dragon wouldn't stare upwards, instead the fact they were about to crash even if this dragon had managed to subside this boy's utter destruction. "Ascend my friend, please." As his hands struck into the thick scales, afraid of why he didn't listen onto his heeding warning about their heading straight into the forest.

With a faint hope there was still life within his friend with a final movement by his wings, and his head straightened upwards, the boy started to joyfully smile, though still aware since they approached faster then they were ascending. But all was in vein, the fathomable doom approached them as they sent through thick presence of tree's before finally torn apart the soil beneath them. With such speed, they couldn't avoid a direct connect with a measurable large passable rock stretching it's physical awareness like a blockade to end the dragon's fast approach.
There was nothing he could do as they crashed into the rock, and with a stunning effect forced him to let go, leaving him pass above in mid-air barely avoiding direct contact before touching the barren lands.

"Warzak" The boy asked when in all his strength getting up onto his feet, and slowly limped back to his rescuer who's path had ended by it's obstructiveness causing him nail into it's wall of choice by nature and will to end his flight.
His hands would stroke above the dragon's head carefully before falling down onto his knee's crying since his manhood couldn't hold such tears away.
His call would be returned by a weakened animal. "Don't cry my boy. I hate to see you loose that well pronounced attitude and fighting spirit end with emotional breakdown for such a cause."

"Your talking like if this would be your final moment." The boy tried to stand positive after finally having a voice to encounter with. His tears was still hard to strain away by using his hand covering most of what left covering his face.

The dragon felt the boy's presence, but soon would realize something greater grew within him and wished to end his existence. The voice in return would now only pass through the boy's mind.
You know it's my time. This is were we shall departure from each other. My life shall continue along the stars, while you make sure to keep my name as a memory of what you have become warrior. So get a hold of your self, and stand up for what you have been made of.

The boy hated such words and forced him pounding upon the dragon's neck with a gentle touch, the more he made so, he would soon realise that his befriended dragon were spoke the truth as blood would now reveal it self. He had no words to return, instead he just kept crying.

I shall then rest my case, i didn't save you for nothing now did i. I hate to see you waste your second opportunity living with something unfinished. I wish to see you battle this engraved and demonic master, and by doing so, you will enrich my heart that i once were proud enough being your companion.

As if the sentence was unfinished the boy started to ask for his dragon's name. But with no return, he knew that there was no return. "Sleep well my friend." As he raised upon his feet looking above with a fist clenched and sword unsheathed carrying out straight into the air. "I shall promise you dragon. That you will be proud of me. And that i shall relinquish your name as a symbol of great friendship and sacrifice towards our own. You shall die by my hand my enemy. And thus i shall see my dragon in the afterlife.

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I don't know, but i wished to see if i can get some good criticism on this. Thanks for reading. And 5th lesson will be posted soon enough.

Verna268

Sep 29 2008, 04:40 PM

I think of myself as a vetren, it all depends on what you think of me

Marsonic

Sep 28 2008, 05:35 PM

Sorry posting so late ^^. I'll join with my character Zanna.

Zanna walked along the outskirts of the forest-like island. A message had been etched out in the dry sand saying "Leave this island at once. Or you will fall like those who didn't follow our advice." the previous day. This didn't scare her. She's had much more feircer threats than this and she was gonna stay there. The island was actually peaceful to her; the birds singing in the morning, the water plopping on the ground from the treetops. What couldn't be better? The only thing was she had no clue how she had gotten there. Maybe one of Hail's expirements went wrong and telliported her there. Who knew? (Hail is one of my other fan char. FYI)

Zanna continued to stroll gracefully, kicking a pebble into the ocean, making some of her rings clank. "Hmf. I'll show them about tryin' to make me get off this island. I'm stayin' here. Try scarin' me off, will they? Well, they're in for the time of their life." Zanna hardly backed down from a fight, and especially wasn't going to get threatened without some sort of clash.