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| Tokui's Story: how to forget...; May contain some blood and gore. | |
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| Topic Started: Mar 30 2008, 06:05 AM (249 Views) | |
| Venoma3d | Mar 30 2008, 06:05 AM Post #1 |
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Prologue It was raining, raining for hours, days even. Water splashed on the windows of the castle like little bombs, exploding every second. A hand touched the window it was covered in blood, like it was butchers hand right after his day-job. It wasn't butchers hand, it was a hand of a person who did the worst of all crimes...murderer. Blood dripped down to the wooden floor like a waterfall, it looked like it had no end. Tear soaked eyes looked outside the window everything looked so peaceful...empty like the house he was in, lifeless. It could look like it was abandoned house, but in fact not so long ago this house was the center of life in this valley. Not any more. Not anymore. The hand drew a couple of stick-figures on the window, blood stick-figures. It looked like a happy family, Mother, Father, and their kids. They danced happy that they're alive, smile appeared on the face of the artist he was going back in time looking at his life, his entire life was going through his head. His entire life was like a film, people say that kind of thing happens when you're about to die, but not in this case....the person was far from dying, you might say his life was ahead of him... Now he remembered what happened he remembers everything.......everything..... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Chapter 1 ''Tokui! Tokui! How long can I wait for you! we have to leave now ! '' A voice from down came waking red hedgehog up, he had sore throat so he quickly got up and dragged himself to bathroom. Once in there he got a glass and got some water from the tap. He drank it quickly but not too fast. He looked up and saw his reflection in the mirror, A regular Hedgehog after waking up. ''Man I gotta lay off Tv before sleep It's killing my eyes!'' He nodded rubbing his eyes his eyes were tired and bored and he couldn't wake up properly he was too tired. He got back to his room and got clothes on the he saw a bird outside singing angel's song freely, and leaves were dancing in the wind a perfect morning. Except one little detail...The sky was dark and you could hear the anger of God thunders were seen far away. Storm was coming. Tokui shrugged and got downstairs, he nearly tripped on a nail standing out of old wooden floor. ''Darn it father can't we change this floor ? '' Tokui growled as this little accident with nail ruined his already bad morning. He had to go to City hall with his father and sort out few papers, he couldn't stay alone in the house because his parents were, well over-protective. He was a young man young enough to take up some serious decisions but yet his parents didn't allow him to stay alone in the house. What a waste. Tokui's mother was preparing a breakfast full of nutrients mainly being made of Vegetables and fruits. Tokui despised these, with all his heart. ''Mum....Do I have to eat those ? '' He nodded sticking a Fork in his nutritions breakfast which only splashed like a drop inside a lake. The whole meal looked like an swamp. Full of Dull colors which didn't help the horrible taste. Hedgehog pushed the meal away and started sipping milk which made a small beard on his chin which he rubbed off swiftly as he wanted to look perfect in the city hall, there was his future job after all. ''Tokui leave the breakfast we're going to be late ! '' Father growled which Tokui ignored as he was obsessed with milk and drinking it everyday at least 3 portions. His mother always thought him that he needs to be strong not only mentally but physically. Tokui turned around and saw his mother and his father arguing, again.It was no surprise to him though he got used to it. He developed a ''six sense'' for their arguments his ears simply blocked them out somehow. Tokui scratched the table with his finger like he had a sword in his hand irritation over-grown him of these ''family situations'' like his dad called them. ''Father let's go we don't want to be late now do we ? '' Tokui nodded as he got up from the table nearly spilling the vegetable mash. The swap stirred up and it nearly fallen out of it's swimming pool. Tokui continued to go towards the doors then as he got near his father finally got to him, not saying a word not even a word. Not a word. ''So....what was it about this time ? Time zones or maybe 3rd world war ? '' Tokui added sarcastically nearly laughing at his own parents but his father simply ignored him and striked a hard look on him. Tokui decided to stay silent. He got into the limo the very back-seat and his father got into the seat next to the driver. Father pulled up a window blocking out the sound from the front and Tokui screwed his face in anger he felt like his father didn't trust him. Like he didn't trust his own child. Chapter 2 Limo finally arrived at the city hall and Tokui got out of the car as fast as he could, he couldn't stand riding in the car it was so boring. His father quickly got out of the car following Tokui, his face looked worried but when Tokui glanced his father he seemed to brighten up with a fake smile, yet a drop of sweat fell down his chin. Tokui cracked his knuckles and started walking, his father quickly cought up and held Tokui's hand tightly. ''What the hell are you doing ? I'm not in nursery as you know ! '' Tokui growled ripping his hand from his father grip, while he nodded in agreement like he didn't notice the rudeness in his son's comment he rushed to the hall and opened the door for Tokui to get in. People inside the city hall looked down at Tokui like he was a bug waiting to be squashed without mercy. Tokui seemed to ignore them as he got in but as he and his father went deeper inside the city hall the staring of the people got to the point where Tokui was angry to the limit. ''What are you staring at you useless minions of the system ! '' Tokui screamed at the middle of the corridor, his father's face started to glow and he quickly grabbed Tokui and nearly dashed to the meeting room where he left Tokui to wait in the chair Tokui took a seat and folded his arms in disappointment as he thought he would be an active part of the meeting but instead he's waiting outside while he hears arguing inside. Tokui stood up and started scratching the wall with his Hand he wasn't leaving any marks he only marked the places like it was some sort of drawing. Tokui then walked up to the window and he saw a bird singing a song outside. Tokui smiled and started listening to the song, but as he was listening a enemy from afar appeared it was a hawk ready to kill the bird for his breakfast. The hunter dived down from the clouds towards the singer with his claws ready to rip the little bird to little pieces. Tokui wanted to do something he started to bang the window for the bird to get scared but it had no use. Hawk was about 10cm from the artists head when suddenly suddenly a purple mist ripped the hunters head off. Blood started to spill all over the tree and the singer ran away. Tokui glanced in amazement he couldn't believe what he was seeing. He rubbed his eyes and there was no blood or no hawk. Strange. Tokui turned around and grabbed his head there was seriously something wrong with him he sat back down and looked on the floor. Then he targeted his footwear. He started waving his feet around like a little child waiting. Then after a minute or so he stopped he felt embarrassed although there was no one in the corridor. He felt like it was over an hour he waited now, so he decided to take a peek through the key hole to see what's going on in the meeting. Strangely enough there was no one there. He stepped into the room and he looked down at the table. Hawk. Headless hawk. ''What in the world...'' He thought, freezing in terror there was absolutely no way this hawk could somehow get into that room. No way. He walked up to it.and started staring at it. Regular hawk. Without head. Tokui didn't feel to well he dashed into the toilet and as he was about to get into the separate cabin, he froze. He was alright all of the sudden that was weird very weird, he decided to investigate dead bird. As he got out of the restroom, everyone was there the meeting was still going on. he was stuck in there without no way out. he had to get out of there somehow but how. ''darn I gotta get out of here somehow'' Tokui whispered. ''You do, otherwise you're screwed! '' Ghostly voice anwsered. ''What...'' Tokui started to sweat like never in his life, he clearly heard the voice but no one was there at least he thought no one was there. Tokui stood there for about five minutes he was sweating like a waterfall then he decided to take a brave step. Turn around. As expected no one was there but he wasn't sure if he's mental of is really something wrong with him. Tokui looked up expecting a miracle to be there. Only a lamp. He heard a voice admitting that he needed to use the toilet. The only choice for Tokui was to hide in one of the cabins and expecting that the man won't use the one he's in. He rushed into random one and he ducked. He heard the man opening the doors. Now which one he will chose...which one.... -------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Okay I know this was a little bit short but I plan to deliver lots of short chapters.....and if the quality has gone down then...sorry >___> Edited by Venoma3d, Jul 18 2008, 01:40 PM.
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Mar 30 2008, 06:37 AM Post #2 |
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DON'T RUSH! THAT R U L E D! |
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| Sanitrex | Mar 30 2008, 07:17 AM Post #3 |
YOU MUST DIE!!
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yeah that was a good fan fic! |
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| Venoma3d | Mar 30 2008, 07:33 AM Post #4 |
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wow...two comments already and I thought this will be one of these ''10 views 1 comment'' topics... but yeah I will have chapter 1 today's night or somewhere in the week. 
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| Sebastian the Hedgehog | Mar 30 2008, 10:30 AM Post #5 |
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Holy **Bleep**ing... WOW MAN! Okay, so Skippy's the Spriter, I'm the Comic Maker, AND NOW YOUR THE FAN FIC WRITER CUZ THAT WAS AMAZING |
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| DragonFlame | Mar 30 2008, 10:56 AM Post #6 |
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Umm, what shall i add. The story is great. Almost fantastic and it havent even started. Cant wait to see more from you Venom. |
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| Kurtis | Mar 30 2008, 11:34 AM Post #7 |
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This was a most awesome Story. Now I want to read more. You surely got my eye attached to it. |
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| Venoma3d | Mar 30 2008, 02:39 PM Post #8 |
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Chapter one is up! Sorry for it being so freaking short but I rather wanted to concentrate on Tokui's mind not in between character conversations. 
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| lilsonic | Apr 1 2008, 10:23 AM Post #9 |
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Nice going pal!! great so far! want more please.
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| DragonFlame | Apr 1 2008, 11:01 AM Post #10 |
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Well except for some few words that seemed to be missing, it aint much false in this story. And short doesn't mean it's bad quality of a story if it keeps coming more. Good detailed show how Tokui interacted with each object, like the dish with food and the glass of milk. I cant wait to the second chapter.
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| Venoma3d | Apr 12 2008, 02:45 PM Post #11 |
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UPDATE ! Chapter 2 is finished hope ya all enjoy it !
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| DragonFlame | Apr 12 2008, 02:52 PM Post #12 |
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What do you mean about quality is not as good like when you started. I liked the effect with the singing bird, and the dissapearence and reappearing with it's head on the meeting table. Awesome, even if it's short.
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| Venoma3d | Jul 18 2008, 01:41 PM Post #13 |
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Epic Update I plan to finish off this story so I can finally present it as Tokui's begging of his way down to madness and then back up ^.^ So Since I have holidays I can spend some time on it! |
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| FourShade | Jul 18 2008, 01:43 PM Post #14 |
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WIN. Thank you, this is made of win. 
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| DragonFlame | Jul 18 2008, 02:46 PM Post #15 |
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It's about time i find out what happens next. Yet i might have to read through this from the beginning again since i don't remember everything. |
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| Venoma3d | Jul 19 2008, 04:57 PM Post #16 |
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Heh, sorry I know I promised I would do the chapter but some relatives came to London and I had to take them on a tour. *sigh* Tommorow is the same but should take less time. I shall do this FF! |
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| Deleted User | Jul 19 2008, 08:23 PM Post #17 |
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This is very detailed, and I'm awaiting for the next chapter. I'm excited about it! |
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| Terry Alpha | Jul 25 2008, 02:09 PM Post #18 |
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Very good work! I like your writing style :3 |
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| Super Wowzaa | Jul 27 2008, 07:16 PM Post #19 |
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